7y ago Heather Gillian Sad! I'm still new to this but can I suggest you try free verse with no rhyme? I thought you really captured something here but were restrained by the rhyme scheme? It made some of the sentences clumsy, hiding their beauty. 10
Heather Gillian I get it.
i try
Heather Gillian Agreed. This poem just gets it!
I don't know
Heather Gillian Love this.
you slept like a hamburger
Heather Gillian Sad! I'm still new to this but can I suggest you try free verse with no rhyme? I thought you really captured something here but were restrained by the rhyme scheme? It made some of the sentences clumsy, hiding their beauty.
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